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Brainchild by =WolvenFlames:iconWolvenFlames:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


Sheer blackness enshrounded forever in nothing, engulfing all that exists.
A motionless void--blank, untouched...
But from these depths arises a shapeless form, blurred and smudged.
Its proportions indefinite; intangible and unseen.

It stumbles awkwardly towards the blinding light and begins to take shape.
Chiseled and molded by traces of imagination--
Transformation takes place, a grim metamorphosis.
It now takes form, crude and wild in appearance, yet still fragile.

The light approaches quickly, guiding the gruesome creature
It crawls ever so slowly towards freedom, the coveted release!
Its evolution is rapid; grotesque features are replaced by smooth, sleek curves;
Streamlined, a thing of beauty!

Its progress is accelerated by a persistent force, unforgiving and impatient.
At last it is thrust through the light and revealed to the world!
A perfect treasure--the masses flock to see this wondrous creation.
A masterpiece unleashed, its maker's pride and glory.

But deep inside it festers, corrupted!
Just another speck in the whirlwind, insignificant in life as once before.
Once unique, but not extraordinary.
A creation made by one but owned by all--

It belongs to the masses now.
©2009 =WolvenFlames
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Author's Comments

:iconcommentplz: :icontardgrinn:


I'm still not used to submitting poetry to dA... it's weird. :XD: And considering that I don't typically write poetry... yeah. This is a rare treat (or maybe you'll call it a horrible disaster? I dunno, read the poem. :3)


Sooo anyways, my -beeeetch- of an English teacher decided to make all of her sophomore students enter two literature contests this year, and I ended up entering an online poetry competition. :P I'm too lazy to write an essay, or for that matter, any other form of creative writing, so BANG. A few lines of free verse, and we have liftoff! 8D


I went for something really creative and... deep. =D It's all about the forming (and constant reshaping) of an idea in your brain. Once you've perfected your idea into a mental masterpiece, you publish it for the world to judge -- and if it's popular enough... you eventually lose control of it. It's really tough for your own idea to remain solely yours in these days. :hmm:


And no critiques please -- I write poetry rarely enough that this is about as good as it gets. xD





~~♥:heart:♥~~

Horrible attempt at poetry © =WolvenFlames
Media: My keyboard :D
Time: 30 minutes?

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~wyrmlover Apr 15, 2009, 1:30:05 PM
This is great. :D

I really liked how ambiguously you described the "creature". :) It leaves the reader wondering what it is and what inspired its creation. In fact, I had no clue what it was until I read the description. xD

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Out from the night, from the mists steps a figure
No one really knows his name for sure
He stands at 6'6" head and shoulders
Pray he never comes knocking at your door.
:iconrikuson2102:
~rikuson2102 Apr 16, 2009, 5:45:57 PM
This really pulled at my imagination. How the "creature" is constantly changing. I really enjoyed reading it.

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I'll WAKA LAKA one on you!!!!!!
:iconcourtj3st3r:
*Jessie aka Jesus aka courtj3st3r RIP, I love you*
:iconcaptain-raven13:
~Captain-Raven13 Apr 16, 2009, 5:47:07 PM
nice! i love free-verse, rhyme-schemes can be REALLY annoying. most of my poems are written when my head is so full of an emotion that i HAVE to get it out, or i will go insane! most of them are pretty emo/depressing/about a guy who i'm not dating. i have one-and-a-half poems written concerning my boyfriend though, but i'm kinda reluctant to post them, cuz i have a good amount of people on here who are my friends at school, and if they read them i'm scared they might tell him. i don't want him to read them. case closed. anyways, here is a link to my first written/typed/posted poem. [link]

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Time LINE...? Ehh, time isn't made out of LINES. It is made out of circles. That is why clocks are round!
~Michael J. Caboose

amazing icon made by the awesome ~karzi012
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~Nalan-TheMuse Apr 16, 2009, 6:15:53 PM
Hmmm.....you know...it's true. You look at any art in a museum, and people just sit there, contemplating what it could really mean. And people do it until the real meaning is lost, and just an abstract idea is left behind of what it really could be. The artist might have spent years to make their art represent one thing, and within a year, it's now another. All that time, effort, and work now becomse nothing that you aimed for, and nothing that you meant to accheive. TT_TT It's all really sad.

I wish you'd write more poetry. :3 Even if you did this for something you didn't want to do, it's really good, and does actually have a meaning to it. Most things these days are just meaningless rambles, and it's nice to find something that actually gets you thinking. :D And the irony is you did this in April, which is national poetry month. :3 (I might do something eventually)

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Admin for the ~BlackScythePack Deviations.

Talk an' song from tongues of lilting grace
Whose sounds caress my ear.
But not a word I heard could I relate
The story was quite clear.

-Kashmir, Led Zeppelin

~:heart:~~PurraParru
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=Jerret-the-Ferret Apr 17, 2009, 3:27:32 AM
Ohhhh, me likey! =D Very well done. :applaud: It is quite deep. d(^^d) I usually don't like free verse too, but this one must be added to favs!
:iconlovesplz:

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<Chester-le-lunatique> I lost faith in humanity. Know why?
<Nalan-TheMuse> Why?
<Chester-le-lunatique> They created Twilight dildos -____-

:tombstone:
:iconwolvenflames:
=WolvenFlames Apr 17, 2009, 9:32:18 PM
Glad you like it! :cuddle: I don't make poetry often, so even for free verse, this is unusually good for me. xD

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...in your pants. >__>


▄▀▄▀▄▀▄ *squee-gasm!* 8D

<Nalan-TheMuse>ONLY THE HOLY TAMPONS CAN BE JESUS!! D:
<blood-red-panda>That's 'cause he's an ass :3

FERRET SEX! :sing: <3
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=WolvenFlames Apr 17, 2009, 9:32:29 PM
Thanks so much! :hug: :3

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...in your pants. >__>


▄▀▄▀▄▀▄ *squee-gasm!* 8D

<Nalan-TheMuse>ONLY THE HOLY TAMPONS CAN BE JESUS!! D:
<blood-red-panda>That's 'cause he's an ass :3

FERRET SEX! :sing: <3
:iconwolvenflames:
=WolvenFlames Apr 17, 2009, 9:36:07 PM
Thanks again for being the only one who commented within a day of me submitting this! :giggle:


I'm glad you think so, because that's exactly what I intended to do -- make the reader wonder exactly what the creature is... :XD: The title gives you a pretty decent idea, but for the most part, I leave the interpretation up to the reader. :3

:heart:

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...in your pants. >__>


▄▀▄▀▄▀▄ *squee-gasm!* 8D

<Nalan-TheMuse>ONLY THE HOLY TAMPONS CAN BE JESUS!! D:
<blood-red-panda>That's 'cause he's an ass :3

FERRET SEX! :sing: <3
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~ostracizedbleu Apr 18, 2009, 12:07:46 PM
Gruesome creature? Writing an autobiography, are we?? JK JK JK! XD

This is amazing. Why didn't you tell me that you're a wizard poet as well as a genius artist?? This was really visually engaging. I like the message I got from it too. Food for thought. (:

You should post poems more often!

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Mors est tantum exordium. Illic est haud preteritus. Illic est haud posterus. Vicis est reproba. Infinitio est iam. Mors est tantum exordium.
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